Nature Haiku

[bmerrell]

Poets Workshop: http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/20682

Choose a moment in daily life through which you recently interacted with nature in a surprising way. Write a haiku that conveys the moment through images, striving to be true to the traditional rules of the form, especially the compressed, three-line structure. Select your images carefully, paying close attention to what is offered through the proximity of the images, rather than only through the images themselves.

[Dilys]

We have armadillos in the early morning sometimes. They sound bigger than they are, and they never run away, always run toward you if you happen to scare them.

In the dark

Rattle of dry leaves
Armadillo hunting bugs
Curved plates gleaming.

Small tank trundling
out of a distant time
startling and startled.

Dilys

[Noldo2]

Dilys, your prose is a haiku:

morning glued to sky
armadillos sound
bigger than they are

Best regards,
James

[Dilys]

HIyas!

Hmm. my sister says I often do that. When I wrote to her about the armadillo and said it looked shrunk from some prehistoric time, small and mean, she said she would never look at them quite the same way again. They are not pleassnt as they often hiss and fight with other armadilloe, and when they fight they are noisy and can jump surprisingly high for their dense, plated bodies.

And, I never thought of morning glued to the sky, but here where there is so much Gulf moisture even before daylight, you often fell sticky and that was a great image to put with the armadillo.

Thanks!

Dilys

[art3m33]

i am not sure if this is the proper way to do this
am i replying to the haiku or dilys haiku though i like the work


my two haiku


reverent silence
library cathedral sit
chattering monkies



wind chimes tree frogs
crickets compete for the best
song of summer love

any critique is much welcomed

[fredericks]

art3m33,

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